Buzzard pursued by crow
This an answer to a query raised in the comments, but it’s something for everyone to read. Have a go, you might like it.
First, read this. Then abandon thoughts of haiku and haibun for a moment.
If I were starting again I would start with tanka prose. These are like haibun in that they contain prose and a poem, but they are more relaxed.
The trouble lies with the poem. A tanka is a small poem (5-7-5-7-7) according to general wisdom. This isn’t true. That syllable count should be the maximum. You can write fewer syllables.
Some editors like to preserve the short-long-short-long-long layout, others don’t mind as long as it has five lines. It’s just a poem and can include poetic effects, though probably not rhyme. As such, it is free from all the baggage that comes with haiku, and all the conflicting views of editors.
Little Egret at Aldeburgh
You can find tanka and tanka prose in Contemporary Haibun Online, Quail Eggs and Cattails. These are all available online. They are also easy to submit to if you want to have a go at being published.
Rather than listen to me, just read tanka and then practice. If I write ten tanka (which can take between twenty minutes and a week) you can be sure that at least one will tail off without being finished, and a couple will clearly be rubbish that can’t be helped by editing. Even after editing it’s likely that only two or three will be good enough to retain. That’s normal. Just keep writing and eventually you will get there. Don’t take notice of your internal editor until you have written a batch, or you will never actually finish a poem.
Eventually you will have enough to send off. Do it. You won’t be published unless you make submissions.
I send out a batch, one is probably accepted, the rest come back. I add another and send them out again. Usually one of the rejects will be picked at this point. I sometimes send things out three four times before I get fed up with them. By that time I usually have replacements written.
Little Egret – Blacktoft Sands
Next – tanka prose. They are like a haibun but with a tanka rather than a haiku. There is some discussion whether a haibun should be in haiku-like language (ie terse and often slightly stilted). You don’t have that with tanka prose, just write what you like. If you can write a blog post you can write a prose section for a tanka prose.
Then write the tanka to go with it. Some people claim to write the haiku/tanka first then write the prose section. I can’t do that. I write the prose and then write a suitable tanka.
Here are some comments I had recently.
“I think the haiku are not nearly as successful as the prose in your haibun.”
“After a careful review of your poem, I regret that I have had to pass it on.”
“Unfortunately, your work did not quite fit the shape that the issue ended up taking.”
“I’m afraid I don’t get this piece. Is it me or is its meaning or intention too obscure?”
The lesson from those comments is that not every submission ends in success and it’s all par of the process.
Heron
So, to summarise – read, write, submit, expect rejection, read, write, submit . . .
Eventually it will work out, but expect some rejections to begin with. At the start the rejections can seem depressing, overpowering and inevitable. Eventually you will get an acceptance, then another, and it will gradually build up . . .
There’s a lot of other stuff tha goes into writing a good tanka prose, and eventually I might learn some of it, but for the moment I find that the best way to work is to write plenty, submit a lot, shrug off rejection and recycle the rejects.
The recycling is key to my writing – it saves effort, and when a reject is accepted it proves that editing is a matter of opinions and rejected work is not always bad work. And above all, it’s about hard work and persistence rather than that ephemeral thing we call talent
Good luck.
Cormorant, Lowestoft, Suffolk
